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Flash Fiction
Chocolate and Death
By Jamie Dorner
*TRIGGER WARNINGS= Murder-suicide, alcohol, language, pedophilia, abortion laws, cancer, house fire.
Tagline: A tragic, controversial, trigger-heavy realistic fiction.
MPA 950 words
I start the fire on a pile of split wood dipped in kerosene outside. A slow burn will give me time. I march into the house. His bowling trophies adorn the mudroom. I knock each one over, watching the precious awards break, stomping on them to be sure none survive. I tip the vodka bottle over the shattered remains.
"Cheers to your victories, asshole."
I remember the first time he celebrated a win after I moved in. I was ten.
"Just like the number of pins and frames!"
I cried harder that night than the months before, when I was mourning my parents. I tried to tell, tried to get help. Everyone cut me off, saying how grateful I must be that my Uncle Cyprus took me in.
I pour more vodka around the kitchen as I search. There's always a box hidden somewhere.
The den has a pile of unopened mail. Bills from the hospital. Bright red envelopes from collection agencies. Three stacks of envelopes from places that will never get paid. Cyprus has no life insurance. I take a swig of the vodka. No reason not to drink. I rub my abdomen. Nope, no reason at all.
Once the desk drawers are flung about, and the vodka is poured out, I leave the room. I grab another bottle from the liquor cart in the living room. There must be a box somewhere, but I haven't found it yet. I knock all the pictures off the mantle. Cyprus with my dad. Cyprus with his bowling team. Cyprus with his car. No pictures of me. My parents' mantle had many pictures of me, of us together, and of their wedding. Love and hope, reasons to live. I soak his pictures with alcohol. I wish I could erase him from the world, to destroy all proof he existed.
I yank his autographed baseball bat off the wall and head to the bathroom. I take a quick chug from the bottle before I start smashing. Seven years of bad luck for breaking a mirror? I've already had those! I glare at the motion-activated cameras he has hidden and flip them off. Let his perverted subscribers see. My final showing will be one of death and destruction.
The smoke alarm blares as I head down the hall. My slow-burning fire has finally gotten inside. Good. But I still want to find a box.
I go into his room. This is where I made my choice. I kick his bloody body. "I know you've got a box of them somewhere. I'm going to find them. The very last box ever."
His corpse remains silent. I throw dresser drawers on him as I search. Finally, in his nightstand, I find the treasure. His Bible, as if he has any idea what that book is about, a clip of extra bullets, and the last box of chocolates. I take the box and kick the bullet hole I put in his head.
"Told you I'd find them." I take another swig of vodka and then pour the remainder of the bottle on him and his drawers of clothing.
I head to my room. On my desk are printouts from the doctors. Most are about my cancer and the treatment plan. Then there's one which states that I'm pregnant and thus ineligible for cancer treatment. Next is an official state document warning that I will face murder charges if the pregnancy isn't successful. Except, without the treatments, I won't survive into the second trimester. The paper on the top has a fuzzy ultrasound image attached. The fetus is deformed and underdeveloped because of my cancer.
Humming to myself, I fill my stolen needle and then inject each chocolate. I look at the teddy bear with the webcam eye.
"I wanted to live. Just four more months and I would have been eighteen. I could have left legally. The cops brought me back three times before. But as an adult, I would have been free! Getting me knocked up might have held me back for a little longer. It's illegal to cross state lines without permission while pregnant. But my cancer-ridden body is murdering the fetus. It's illegal to grant needed medical care here in my condition. So, since I'd be dying while imprisoned for murder, I saw no reason not to kill Cyprus."
I pop a chocolate into my mouth. It oozes on my tongue. The poison stings, but the chocolate still tastes sweet. Puffs of smoke sneak under my bedroom door.
"This is gonna be a snuff film. I hope you all get caught watching it. I hope the authorities find each and every one of you and lock you up on charges of child pornography." I eat another chocolate. "I sent copies of his computer stuff to the FBI and six news agencies. Hopefully, someone bothers to check."
It's harder to enjoy the next chocolate. The poison is fast-acting. My damaged bedroom door has tiny flames in the cracks.
"Please know that I do not regret my choices. If I could have prevented him from molesting me, I would have. If I could have avoided him impregnating me, I would have. I'd gladly do any cancer treatment offered. I would have fought to live. And I'd have left without killing him. Yes, I thought about it. That murder was absolutely premeditated. I am grateful to be guilty of it. I might have left him alive. This is better."
The last chocolate passes over my lips. It sticks to the roof of my mouth as my eyes close. The world fades away as the treat he always denied me mixes with my final breath.
This story takes place in America.
It may or may not be currently legal for a pregnant minor to cross state lines. There was some debate as to if human beings are the property of a state, or if that would be similar to the terms of slavery. Also, it's difficult to enforce as there's not much separating most states.
Miscarriages may or may not be illegal, and may or may not come with a murder charge. The removal of a fetus which has a failure to thrive and has no signs of survival is also called abortion, but not removing it causes toxins that kill the host.
In some states, a pregnancy test must be done before anyone with a vagina can receive any healthcare treatment (like an Xray) that could risk a potential fetus, even when not getting that treatment immediately can mean the patient dies.
Many treatments can be denied in certain states even if there is absolutely no possible way the fetus can survive long enough in a dying host to be a viable birth -- which is the case in this story. She has been denied cancer treatment because of the pregnancy, but the fetus would never have been born anyway, it could never develop lungs or other needed organs, and the cancer will win. If she were permitted to have treatment, she might go on to have many children, maybe become the scientist who cures cancer, who knows. The fetus is no longer viable at the start of this story. The main character is dead at the end of this story.
The real stories are more and more horrific, and yet news coverage is so minimal. Very well done!
ReplyDeleteI can't believe how much we've lost and may still lose to the Nazi survivors that fled to and are rebuilding the US in their image!
Hear hear! Assuming you mean surviving Nazis and not survivors of Nazism, because I won't blame people such as the Jews, Jehovah Witnesses, LGBTQ+, etc. Great-great Uncle Shindler worked hard to save as many as he could.
Delete🤔 And what were the terrorists on 9/11 advocating? Book bans, reduced rights for women and children, ousting LGBTQ+, mandated prayer several times a day...
DeleteI only condemn white supremacists, Nazis who survived their judgement by coming to America, and many other countries as they fled their own destroyed country. Now they fight to destroy all others from within. As for 9/11, America has created many enemies through interference in the governance of other countries. The world has a long way to go for peace, and it begins with destroying individual rights. Forgive me for turning this into a political statement. Your story hit hard!
DeleteTo end peace begins with destroying individual right!
DeleteOuch. Horrific and too close to the bone. From the other side of the world I watch in horror and hope that those of our politicians who are applauding never ever regain power.
ReplyDeleteYeah. It's gonna be REAL interesting in America next year.
DeleteWhich brings to mind the purportedly Chinese curse 'may you live in interesting times...'
DeleteJamie, I read this and my soul plummeted. Right from the start and with your preamble, I guessed where it was going. I hope there are not too many real stories like this, but I fear there may be. Thank you for being brave and sharing it with us. Sweetened with poisoned chocolate, oh my!
ReplyDeleteYeah, hunting for that gone box of chocolate.
DeleteI considered submitting this for the Gone Gone Gone, but figured it'd be wayyyy to controversial. So I swapped the original search item for chocolate and it works perfectly.
HI, I could have cried. Instead, I got very angry at the injustices that are done to children. Very well written and it kept me reading until the end. Shalom shalom
ReplyDeleteHi, sorry, but I forgot to put name in above and it came out as anhonymous. But it's me, Pat Garcia. Shalom shalom
ReplyDeleteGlad I could evoke such emotions in you. Thanks for the comments.
DeleteHi Jamie - what an appropriate way to die - but so desperate they felt they had to end their own life ... I too hope the bowler can feel his burning comeuppance as he goes off to meet with the devil. Appalling ... but well written and for including chocolate into the poisonous mix ... Hilary
ReplyDeleteThanks so much.
DeleteYeah, we may be overpopulating Hell.
This shook me to the core. The fact that this is not simply fiction, but the story of countless individuals around the world is a terrifying truth. Very impactfully portrayed.
ReplyDeleteGlad to shake you. Thanks for reading.
DeleteThis story is tragic and angry, and I agree with every word of it. Powerful.
ReplyDeleteThanks
DeleteHi Jamie! That is a powerful piece, very well executed. It's disturbing, and it makes me pause and ponder about a lot of things. Well done!
ReplyDeleteExcellent. I love when a reader ponders.
DeleteNo matter how far Women's Rights have come, it is a myth we have any rights to our bodies once we become pregnant.this was horrific, gut wrenching, and very well written.
ReplyDeleteNever stop fighting though.
DeletePowerful, Jamie. Horrific that scenes like this happen. I hope the political spectrum in your country & the world sees a shift to kindness and common sense.
ReplyDelete🤞 Never stop wishing, hoping, and fighting for that.
DeleteDoes the narrator find redemption in her actions? I'd like to believe she does. Well written and with great emotional impact. Even if we are able somehow to escape these childhood traumas, they remain. coloring our lives and our ability to heal.
ReplyDeleteI guess that's a debate for the afterlife (*assuming ones energy goes to an afterlife of some sort).
DeleteDevastatingly horrific and too real for comfort. Excellent take on the prompt. Truly powerful, emotional and thought provoking - this hits real hard. Well done, Jamie! (Thoroughly fed up of right wingers this side too, btw!)
ReplyDeleteI saw one of the Republicans running with a promise to RAISE the minimum voting age.
Delete😄 I responded by suggesting the age is lowered and anyone who is diagnosed as pregnant gets automatic voting rights so they can try to eject the officials who will decide what happens to their own body.
If that means 7 year old voters, so be it!
Seriously, it's posted on my Twitter and Instagram.
I don't believe anyone should have to carry a pregnancy to term against her will. Early on in the pregnancy a woman (or adolescent girl) should be able to obtain an abortion on demand, no questions asked. Certainly no woman should be forced to carry a pregnancy by rape to term, nor should she have to forego life-saving medical treatment to carry a pregnancy to term.
ReplyDeletePeople who think outlawing abortion will save babies are not thinking the problem through. Enacting draconian laws preventing women and girls from terminating unwanted pregnancies only results in illegal abortions and unwanted babies.
I don't think anyone actually believes it's about saving babies. They'd be fighting way harder for prenatal care and not BLOCKING PRENATAL CLINICS if they cared at all about babies. They'd have rallies to raise money to help couples adopt, not rallies to reduce the number of people willing to adopt by forbidding it. They'd advocate for more funds for food and care for poor children, not fight to put blocks in place to starve them.
ReplyDeleteNo. I think they all know it has nothing to do with helping babies. That's just what they tell themselves so they can sleep at night when a tiny child is molested and dies because her body is unable to carry a pregnancy to term and only menstruated so young because of the chemicals in food and water. Which is there because of choices adults made in the Industrial Revolution, long before that girl was born.
Hi Jamie. I had to come back and read again. This would have been an impactful flash for the anthology, but as you rightly say, a tad controversial for the readership. Remember, this is happening mainly in the good ole US of A. Most enlightened societies aren't this 'stupid' re abortion. Thank God. All those old men calling the shots - ugh!
ReplyDeleteYeah. I considered that as well. The story I did submit is fairly universal among societies without arranged or forced marriages.
Delete(Which obviously DO happen everywhere, but are generally not the norm, as far as I know. )
Hi Jamie,
ReplyDeleteThis was such a strong narration. I was sucked into the story from the word go.
Thank you.
DeleteCarole: Wow. A hard take. But when someone is prepared to die for something, no power on earth can stop them. Sometimes only by dying will others listen. When did our societies stop listening to common sense, stop listening to the ordinary person and to choose not to believe the young or the innocent? We have sold our souls for silver! In the words of my favourite film... "Go and be a better man" (woman).
ReplyDeleteI like to think she didn't actually want to die. She wanted to treat her cancer, she wanted to live. But since that was off the table, she was making a choice between terrible options. 🤷♀️
DeleteI feel that the main character really wanted to live. She wanted her cancer treatments. But once that was off the table she was left with deciding which way to die. Prison for a miscarriage, infection and death from a dead fetus, or this.
DeleteThis is a very powerful post and I can feel your anger simmer through it. We, in other parts of the world, are as horrified as you are by what's happening in your country. Thank you for writing this.
ReplyDeleteScience is taking a big hit around here from the people over 75 who make too many of the decisions.
DeleteIt's tragic! Congratulations on your win though.
DeleteHUGE congratulations on your WEP Award.
ReplyDeleteReally very powerful. I can't wait to see what you'll write next.
ReplyDelete"The only thing you absolutely have to know is the location of the library." – Albert Einstein quote
September is library card sign-up month! Get one, use one, and be grateful such places exist.
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